The Heartfelt College Application Letter That Got Me Into College (Unedited).

I recently dug up my college application letter that got me into Claremont McKenna College. This was written by an 18 year old Yohei, and 8 years later, I must say I’m surprised at how consistent I’ve been. Please excuse my writing, I had just spent three years at a high school in Japan and my english had deteriorated quite a bit.

Definitely read the signature at the bottom, it’s the most ridiculous part of the application letter.

Dear people that are going to read this letter,

My name is Yohei Nakajima. I was raised in a Japanese family of four; I have one younger brother. After moving to Seattle at the age of two, I spent thirteen years of my life there until I moved to Japan for the last 3 years of high school. The reason I moved to Japan was because my parents wanted me to have some sort of Japanese education before I decided a country in which to go to college to. While many students had trouble deciding a college within the United States, I was first faced with two big choices, whether to go to college in Japan or in the United States. Since all of my friends from high school are moving onto college in Japan, it was a hard decision, but I decided that I would like to continue my education in the United States. Japan is a very college-conscious society, and people are based on the college they go to, and not how hard they study there. This results in many Japanese college students to party for four years. I believe that I know myself well, and I knew it would make it a lot easier for me to study when surrounded by peers with high aspirations.

When people ask me why I chose Claremont McKenna College, I tell them “love at first sight.”

After convincing my parents, who wanted me to go to a Japanese college, to visit American colleges with me, I spent a spring and a summer to visit over 15 college on both the east and west coast. I was looking for a small college where I could get to know everybody very well. I was looking for a college far enough from the city that people would stay on campus, but close enough to go on the weekends. I was looking for a college where students were there to study, but ready to have fun. I was looking for a college that would give me chances to meet people that would have a positive effect on me. I had an extremely specific idea of the college I wanted to spend four years at. I didn’t think any college would fit my idea of an “idea college”, but I was wrong. When people ask me why I chose Claremont McKenna College, I tell them “love at first sight.” It was no question. I had actually fallen in love with the campus and the atmosphere.

In the future, I am looking to be an entrepreneur.

In the future, I am looking to be an entrepreneur. I was thinking about dual majoring in economics and legal studies. I want to meet people I could work with after college, and I want to become close friends with many of these people. My academic strengths are in the math and sciences but learning those subjects and the jobs in those subjects did not appeal to me. This is one of the reasons I am choosing entrepreneurship for my future, because I would always start a company that had to do with technology, and I thought my strength could help me there. Through the people I meet, and through the many subjects I study at CMC, I hope to find an interest, which I may later continue as an entrepreneur.

I am confident that I will lead one of the most fun, most educational, and most fulfilling college life that anybody has ever lead.

I do not have any concerns for college, and I am confident that I will lead one of the most fun, most educational, and most fulfilling college life that anybody has ever lead. My only expectation from college is to be part of my great college life. I hope to become a leading member of the college and be one of the most involved students with the college.

People value many things in life, and I happen to value happiness the most. I consider myself to be one of the happiest people in the world, I have always been this way, and plan to stay this way.

I consider myself to be very “go with the flow” kind of person. I keep my goals extremely high, but I keep my expectations extremely low. This allows me to work hard and keep trying, but to stay happy. People value many things in life, and I happen to value happiness the most. I consider myself to be one of the happiest people in the world, I have always been this way, and plan to stay this way. I see the best things in life, and ignore all the bad things in life. Although many people would think of this as ignorant, I would have to ask those people why being ignorant is bad if it can keep you happy. I truly believe in the phrase “ignorance is bliss” from the Matrix, but this does not mean I do not have aspiration. There are many things in life that still motivate me to grow to my potential, which I believe is extremely high (Note: I am full of myself, and extremely aware of it, but I love myself for it, and it makes me happy).

…we have become engaged…We both also understand that it may not work and in that case we shall both go on with life.

One of the things that motivate me is something I would like to share. She is a girl I met in my years at Japan and is extremely important to me. Although we both understand it may seem hasty, we have become engaged. She will spend four years of college in Japan while I study at CMC, and she plans to move to the United States after that. Although we both understand that in most cases a four year long term relationship does not work, we are going to try. We both also understand that it may not work and in that case we shall both go on with life. With Akane in my life, I believe I will be able to concentrate on my studying and social life. I’m going to make and assumption that I am the only person to write about the fiancé in their introduction letter, so you can tell how much she means to me.

this is something people will figure out quickly, and something people will not forget: I love everybody.

Now if I may, I want to make one last point that I am actually a very fun guy. I wasn’t sure if this introduction letter was a formal one or not, so I decided to go ahead and try to write a formal letter. My writing is something I know I must work on. It has never been my strong point, and living in Japan for three years didn’t help too much. Oh, this is actually going to be my last point, and this is something people will figure out quickly, and something people will not forget: I love everybody.

Yes, I love you too, and I can’t wait to see you,

Your loving friend,

YOHEI NAKAJIMA

PS: I really can’t wait to start college at CMC.

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